My 1st Ejection

[lawump]

First: As Pauley said in Goodfellas, "Hey, you popped a cherry!" Congrats.

Second: If the coach called you a $&^%* then put that he called you a $&^%*.

Third: I wouldn't say "controversal play". To me that makes it sould like there is a possibility that you screwed up...even though it appears that you didn't from your further description. I would eliminate that language.

Good job!

[GarthB]

My version:

(Addressed to the League President),

During the fifth inning of the game between xxx and yyy earlier today xxx head coach asked for an explanation of a "catch/no catch" call. After my explanation (coach) stated "You're incompetent." I said "that's enough coach" and he replied "you're still incompetent." He was immediately ejected.

He left the immediate premises and the game was completed without further incident.

Sincerely,

Umpire's name
email address and phone number.

Original Version: 296 words/ 19.5 words per sentence
New Version: 64 words/ 12.2 words per sentence

[fitump56]

Originally Posted by GarthB

My version:

(Addressed to the League President),

During the fifth inning of the game between xxx and yyy earlier today xxx head coach asked for an explanation of a "catch/no catch" call. After my explanation (coach) stated "You're incompetent." I said "that's enough coach" and he replied "you're still incompetent." He was immediately ejected.

He left the immediate premises and the game was completed without further incident.

Sincerely,

What a croc. Tell the truth, if Coach popped off with profanities, or whatever, write it up.